ext_42763 ([identity profile] flippet.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] quaggy 2010-01-15 03:27 pm (UTC)

who lead his country

You want 'led' here.

Otherwise, very nice. I like the pacing. And the last line is wonderful - very musical, adds just the right touch.

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