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Quaggy ([personal profile] quaggy) wrote2009-11-04 10:11 pm

Fic Commentary Meme

Gakked from [livejournal.com profile] zinke. Because writers like to talk about what they write about (even if all they write is fic)...

Pick a paragraph (or any passage less than 500 words) from any fanfic I've written, and comment to this post with that selection. I will then give you a DVD commentary on that snippet: what I was thinking when I wrote it, why I wrote it in the first place, what's going on in the character's heads, why I chose certain words, what this moment means in the context of the rest of the fic, lots of awful puns, and anything else that you'd expect to find on a DVD commentary track.

You can find all my West Wing fic here and all my non-West Wing fic (including Gilmore Girls, Harry Potter and Avatar: The Last Airbender) over here.

And yes, for drabbles and ficlets, I'll comment on the whole thing. If anybody is interested, that is!

[identity profile] zinke.livejournal.com 2009-11-05 04:01 pm (UTC)(link)
Huzzah! Not oly to get I get to hear commentray from you on a favorite fic of mine, but I also had an excuse tore-read it (not that I needed one, but still...)

His back was up against the wall. Both figuratively and literally. He was sitting on the floor watching his wife pack for a trip that now had no scheduled end date. And there was nothing he could do about it.

“This wasn’t the way it was supposed to be,” Josh said wearily, as he let his head fall back against the wall behind him, the tension that had left him earlier slowly returning.

“Yet, here we are,” Donna sighed, trying to make order out of her suitcase and the mess they had recklessly made when they had first gotten home.

“It’s all turned to shit.”

“What did you expect, Josh?”

“I don’t know,” he shot back, matching her intense tone—not quite yelling… but close. “Something sure as hell different from this! What did you expect?”

“I expected fidelity,” she said with quiet dignity and knelt beside him so she could better see his face.

“Well, that was your first fucking mistake… or mine, depending on how you look at it,” he sneered.

He let his head roll towards her and their eyes met. They stared at each other for a beat. Two. And then they were in each other’s arms holding on for dear life, each simultaneously reaching for the other. Donna swung an arm and leg over him as Josh practically dragged her across his body, both of them trying to get as close as they possibly could. The day… week… year had been long. Far too long. And it seemed like they had been at odds for most of it. Right now, it seemed that the best way to survive this was by simply clinging to each other.

“If you ever cheated on me, I think I’d kill you,” Donna mumbled into somewhere between Josh’s neck and collarbone.

[identity profile] unoriginal-liz.livejournal.com 2009-11-06 10:36 pm (UTC)(link)
I'm not too late to get in on this, am I? I love fic-writery-commentary :)

I choose -

In some ways, it would have been simpler if it had been one of them that had died in Ron’s place. It’s only natural to think that two blokes, friends since their first day at Hogwarts, would want to room together. And everyone, even Harry, half expected that something would happen between Ron and Hermione. No one would have questioned those pairs. No one would have tried to interfere with either scenario. No one seems to understand that when they are together, a part of Ron still is there. No one can grasp that if Harry and Hermione now lose each other, they will have truly lost everything.

They aren’t comfortable when they’re with the Weasleys anymore. Ron’s absence is far too obvious. Ron had stayed behind at his parents’ behest, leaving Hermione alone to destroy the last horcruxes as Harry confronted Voldemort. They both know that if Ron had been aware that staying behind would have meant his death, he would still have chosen to do so in order to save his family. They find that comforting, but perhaps it’s a torment for the Weasleys.

Surprisingly, it is Hermione who feels the estrangement with the Weasleys more keenly. She had been almost as close to Ginny as she had been to Ron and Harry and now, in losing Ron, she has lost the friendship of his sister as well. Or maybe Ginny, like any other girl Harry had been interested in romantically, didn’t understand how Harry and Hermione could be so close. And, just like all the others, when she forced him to choose, he chose Hermione. But a female confidant is easier to replace than a friend like Ron. Hermione already knew someone who could fill the empty space Ginny had left behind. Luna is flighty, disorganized and totally illogical, Hermione’s complete opposite in so many ways, but she is also a kind, intelligent, accepting soul. Her little house, filled to the roof tiles with the most astonishing number of knickknacks, is as warm and welcoming as Hagrid’s hut. Hermione could never trust anyone the way she trusts Harry or trusted Ron, but Luna comes close. She honestly feels like she could confide anything without Luna judging her.

[identity profile] unoriginal-liz.livejournal.com 2009-11-08 12:09 am (UTC)(link)
I look forward to it! :)

PS - look what you've done. Your cute Danny icon has FORCED me to go looking for Sports Night icons. FORCED ME!

[identity profile] unoriginal-liz.livejournal.com 2009-11-08 07:50 pm (UTC)(link)
...you!